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柳长忠

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>朱凌云</i>在2006-7-8 11:33:03的发言：</b><br/><p>我也来一张原来的习作，请柳老师狠批！！！</p><p>&nbsp;</p><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067811325749227.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067811325749227.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/></div><p><font size="6">凌云这作品，好的方面已经很多了，不说哈，主要问题是习气太重，横画取势都朝右上方倾斜，显得机械而缺少变化。要注意相同笔画可在向背上作些变化，或相向或相背，这样就不会让人感觉单调了！</font></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-7-8 18:52:44编辑过]

杨宇力

<p>我贪心，发两张．会不会过分？（那下不为例吧）</p><p>柳老师一定很忙的！柳老师辛苦了！</p><p>恭听柳老师教诲．</p><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067818483825958.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067818483825958.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006781849948079.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006781849948079.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/>

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-7-8 18:51:45编辑过]

柳长忠

<p><font size="7">宇力的草书形式感强，有冲击力。但我感觉缠绕、跌宕有些过头,好象一个人一直直不了身在那儿疯狂跳舞。草书应该是节奏感非常鲜明的，有舒缓、有激烈，有飞动、有凝固，有粗犷、有细腻，不能一个调。这就是你要认真理解和把握的东西。简约而不简单，飞动而不杂乱，险势而又稳重。这就是我要对你说的！！！</font></p><p><font size="7"></font></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-7-8 20:28:26编辑过]

杨卫列

柳老师说得很中肯！

杨宇力

<p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="5">感谢柳老师啊!!!</font></p><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="5">柳老师这番教导铭记在心!当时时揣摩!</font></p><p><font face="楷体_GB2312" size="5">拜谢!!!</font></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-7-8 22:06:23编辑过]

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<p><font color="#3333cc">一针见血啊!</font></p>

刘志华

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>柳长忠</i>在2006-7-8 11:05:01的发言：</b><br/><font size="6">志华的作品越来越成熟了。对你的建议除了上述稚拙、厚重、简约以外，还要注意字形的变化，你的结字形体过多偏长，使味道不很高古，要多种形态兼备！</font><br/></div><p></p>感谢先生赐教！！！！！！！！！

逸墨轩主

<img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006791043210422.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006791043210422.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/>

半轮秋

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>柳长忠</i>在2006-7-8 10:29:50的发言：</b><br/><p><font color="#0909f7" size="6"></font></p><p><font color="#0909f7" size="6">结字、行气、章法都已做得不错了。现在的问题是如何继续提高作品的品位。什么样的作品品位才是高的呢？我认为稚拙、厚重、简约应该是你追求的更高目标。你的字已很灵秀，做到灵秀已经不易，但灵秀漂亮并不是最高境界，“写到生时是熟时”，返朴归真，让自己作品的情趣具有孩童稚拙的风貌，应该是你下一步努力的方向。厚重是指用笔凝炼，笔力遒劲，不浮滑，你的用笔很流畅，但少了一点厚重，你还得体会，如何才能把每一笔写得厚重又充满生机，流美又不浮滑，富有变化但又不过分夸张而又有内涵。简约是行草书的又一境界。你的字牵丝连接过多，显得不太简捷，可增加一些章草的写法，或者在书写时多求笔断意联，少一些牵丝，让笔画更精简，更直白。</font></p><p><font color="#0909f7" size="6"></font></p><p></p></div><p><font color="#ff0000" size="7">感谢柳老师的精心点评，学生收益匪浅，定当谨记！</font></p>

钱宝成

<p>请柳老师和各位名家评评！</p><p></p><p><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006710621747629.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006710621747629.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067106213787158.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067106213787158.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067106214848782.gif" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067106214848782.gif\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/></p><p>今天先来 三幅，改天&nbsp; 再来！</p><p>多谢柳老师了！</p><p>第一回展赛，进展如何，宝成时时关注&nbsp; 您主办的此活动呀！</p><p>相信一切都很完美！</p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-7-10 6:23:11编辑过]