[原创]国峰临习《妙严寺记》，请孙老师批改作业！！！

国峰

<p>过几日还将上传我临的欧体作品，还请孙老师指路！</p><p>国峰表示感谢</p><p><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517591512580.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517591512580.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517592990276.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517592990276.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517594073522.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517594073522.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517595055713.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517595055713.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/2006615180033301.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/2006615180033301.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/20066151801093748.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/20066151801093748.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-6-19 9:16:26编辑过]

孙光松

<p>基本功扎实,临贴熟练,通篇风格和谐统一,能较好地把握原帖的风格.是一篇不错的临作.</p><p>微觉宽博圆润不够,有些笔画稍显生硬.另外要注意你很多笔画的起笔钉头过于明显,如:"寺"的竖画,"本"的撇画等的起笔处.</p><p>不一定正确,仅供参考.</p><p>谢谢!</p><p></p>

国峰

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>孙光松</i>在2006-6-16 12:57:35的发言：</b><br/><p>基本功扎实,临贴熟练,通篇风格和谐统一,能较好地把握原帖的风格.是一篇不错的临作.</p><p>微觉宽博圆润不够,有些笔画稍显生硬.另外要注意你很多笔画的起笔钉头过于明显,如:"寺"的竖画,"本"的撇画等的起笔处.</p><p>不一定正确,仅供参考.</p><p>谢谢!</p><p></p></div><p>感谢孙老师的点拨！</p><p>在今后的临帖当中，我会注意克服和改正以上缺点。可能临习欧体养成了一些“陋习”，不小心带到赵体中来。</p><p>对于我今后的出路是以欧体为主还是以赵体为主，还请孙老师看过我的欧体临帖后给与建议。</p><p>国峰在这里谢过了!</p>

孙光松

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>国峰</i>在2006-6-16 13:48:19的发言：</b><br/><p>感谢孙老师的点拨！</p><p>在今后的临帖当中，我会注意克服和改正以上缺点。可能临习欧体养成了一些“陋习”，不小心带到赵体中来。</p><p>对于我今后的出路是以欧体为主还是以赵体为主，还请孙老师看过我的欧体临帖后给与建议。</p><p>国峰在这里谢过了!</p></div><p>先看看你的欧楷再说.</p>

怡然自得

为何不用软笔临临呢。感觉这样用钢笔写没什么前途。太硬了，体会不到原帖的味道。建议你用毛笔多临，少用钢笔。

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