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柳长忠

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[此贴子已经被天下一人于2006-8-5 2:32:12编辑过]

逸墨轩主

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陆新华

好事啊，大家发啊

cmcjyy

<img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067718164088641.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067718164088641.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/>

逸墨轩主

快来求批

柳长忠

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>逸墨轩主</i>在2006-7-7 13:31:44的发言：</b><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067713313159527.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067713313159527.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/></div><p><font size="5">总体来看，单字和章法都具备一定基础。但是，还存在一些毛病：</font></p><p><font size="5">1、行书最讲究意连，转折处多圆转，而你的行书受楷书影响较重，看起来在写行书，实在用的是楷法，笔笔交代得过于清楚，特别是转折处多方折，显得生硬而缺少行意；</font></p><p><font size="5">2、看得出临习过一些传统碑帖，有王字的一些影子，但临得不深，味道也不是很足，更多的是自己的东西；</font></p><p><font size="5">3、用笔不是很精到，有拖泥带水的现象，不简捷、不圆润。</font></p><p><font size="5">建议：就从王羲之《兰亭序》或者《圣教序》入手，认真临摹，彻底吃透，直到形神兼备再去换帖！</font></p>

柳长忠

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>cmcjyy</i>在2006-7-7 18:16:45的发言：</b><br/><img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067718164088641.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/20067718164088641.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/></div><p><font color="#1111ee" size="6">从这件习字来看，你基本上还处在学习书法的初级阶段。基本笔画的形态还没有完全掌握，字的结构还不是十分清楚，只了解了结字的基本样子。建议你找一家喜欢的碑或帖进行临摹。注意原帖上的笔画形态，一点一画先求象。再注意记住字的结构形态。要了解一些结字规律：比如：平正匀称、重心平稳；参差向背、相互避让；撇捺舒展，姿态各异。。。等一些汉字结构规律！不要写现代人出版的字帖，取法要高，不要贪多求快，现在就想出成果，要花一到两年时间，静下心来习练传统碑帖，专攻一家，待掌握后再去博览众长。</font></p>

小草

<p></p><p><font color="#ff3300" size="6"><strong>热烈祝贺写字门诊开业！！！</strong></font></p>

半轮秋

<img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006772225740096.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-7/2006772225740096.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /><br/>

杨宇力

<div class="quote"><b>以下是引用<i>小草</i>在2006-7-7 22:21:45的发言：</b><br/><p></p><p><font color="#ff3300" size="6"><strong>热烈祝贺写字门诊开业！！！</strong></font></p></div><p>柳老师评得好！有收获！</p>