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标题: [原创]国峰临习《妙严寺记》，请孙老师批改作业！！！ [打印本页]

作者: 国峰 时间: 2006-6-16 02:01:52 标题: [原创]国峰临习《妙严寺记》，请孙老师批改作业！！！

过几日还将上传我临的欧体作品，还请孙老师指路！国峰表示感谢<img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517591512580.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517591512580.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /> <img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517592990276.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517592990276.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /> <img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517594073522.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517594073522.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /> <img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517595055713.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/200661517595055713.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /> <img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/2006615180033301.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/2006615180033301.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" /> <img src="attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/20066151801093748.jpg" border="0" onload="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onmouseover="if(this.width>screen.width*0.7) {this.resized=true; this.width=screen.width*0.7; this.style.cursor=\'hand\'; this.alt=\'Click here to open new window\nCTRL+Mouse wheel to zoom in/out\';}" onclick="if(!this.resized) {return true;} else {window.open(\'attachments/dvbbs/2006-6/20066151801093748.jpg\');}" onmousewheel="return imgzoom(this);" alt="" />

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作者: 孙光松 时间: 2006-6-16 20:57:35

基本功扎实,临贴熟练,通篇风格和谐统一,能较好地把握原帖的风格.是一篇不错的临作.微觉宽博圆润不够,有些笔画稍显生硬.另外要注意你很多笔画的起笔钉头过于明显,如:"寺"的竖画,"本"的撇画等的起笔处.不一定正确,仅供参考.谢谢!

作者: 国峰 时间: 2006-6-16 21:48:19

<div class="quote">以下是引用孙光松在2006-6-16 12:57:35的发言： 基本功扎实,临贴熟练,通篇风格和谐统一,能较好地把握原帖的风格.是一篇不错的临作.微觉宽博圆润不够,有些笔画稍显生硬.另外要注意你很多笔画的起笔钉头过于明显,如:"寺"的竖画,"本"的撇画等的起笔处.不一定正确,仅供参考.谢谢!</div>感谢孙老师的点拨！在今后的临帖当中，我会注意克服和改正以上缺点。可能临习欧体养成了一些“陋习”，不小心带到赵体中来。对于我今后的出路是以欧体为主还是以赵体为主，还请孙老师看过我的欧体临帖后给与建议。国峰在这里谢过了!

作者: 孙光松 时间: 2006-6-17 00:09:58

<div class="quote">以下是引用国峰在2006-6-16 13:48:19的发言： 感谢孙老师的点拨！在今后的临帖当中，我会注意克服和改正以上缺点。可能临习欧体养成了一些“陋习”，不小心带到赵体中来。对于我今后的出路是以欧体为主还是以赵体为主，还请孙老师看过我的欧体临帖后给与建议。国峰在这里谢过了!</div>先看看你的欧楷再说.

作者: 怡然自得 时间: 2007-12-25 16:29:00

为何不用软笔临临呢。感觉这样用钢笔写没什么前途。太硬了，体会不到原帖的味道。建议你用毛笔多临，少用钢笔。

作者: xidebin000 时间: 2008-1-4 15:06:45

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